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PostPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 3:57 pm    Post subject: Your Challenge Reply with quote

Father's day poems, become alive!!!

No seriously though, I wanna see what everyone writes. Now get to it! The deadline is Father's day.
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 8:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I never could turn down a challenge, lol. I don't know if my poem really...fits with what most people will write, but it's more specific to my situation I think. Anyway, judge it for yourself, love or hate, it is what it is, and it's me. I've color coded the chorus lines, and the last two stanzas (I think the term is) keep the chorus pace, but switch to a bit heavier singing. Or, well, they do in my head...

In Your Name
Matthew Mullins 06/13/08


I'm sitting up in the dark
We're both trapped in this frame
I struggle, try to understand
But the answers won't stay the same

Peaceful, you're sleeping on the couch
With a happy smile, lost in bliss
Fell asleep watching your nightly show
I know this is something I will miss

But how can I face what I try to hide
How do I become a better man inside
Nothing worth having is ever easy to obtain
But the life that I'm living
Feels like I'm living it in vain


I could never wake you up to say this
So many words you wouldn't understand
A million reasons I've been given
And I still can't make my stand

So let this poem be my record
Of what I wish I could say tonight
Don't ever let people lie to you
Or tell you it won't ever be alright

I may not be the best role model
I may never become that man
Have faith in what I say to you
I love you as strongly as I can

But how can I face what I try to hide
How do I become a better man inside
Nothing worth having is ever easy to obtain
But the life that I'm living
Feels like I'm living it in vain


There are still decisions I cannot make
And a moment can be too much to take
I'm fading from all of this pressure
Yet I can't move until I'm sure

I've never had to face what I am inside
And I can't find a way to shed the fears that I hide
Every day is a struggle to try and stay sane
But for all the battles that I'm waging
Know I'm fighting in your name
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 9:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

My God, Matthew, it's beautiful! How do you crank stuff out like that!
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 9:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

...er... well, to quote a friend of mine who I consider a brother:

"The greatest poetry was always inspired by the deepest pain."

Anyhow, I'm anxious to see what everyone else comes up with. Hopefully their Father's Day(s) are a bit more...um, happy? lol :sweatdrop:
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 13, 2008 9:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

...well that sucks. I rather liked it. Too bad you must have stubbed your toe or something before writing it.

*blink* *blink* I was kidding. Honestly.

Erm, anyone else like to contribute? *don'tlookatme*
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 4:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, what with father's day being less than ten minutes away, I think I've missed the deadline. ^_^ And I've got to finish packing, I shouldn't really be online at all...
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 7:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Is this the part where I play the bad influence and urge you to post? Very Happy
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 8:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

YES
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 1:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I can't, I've got no time. I just woke up ten minutes ago, and I need to get off the computer soon. I've got to finish packing a year's worth of stuff into three bags today, and I'm going out with my father as well. I don't have time to think, let alone write something emotionally profound.
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